Welcome Party

Jul 1, 2015 14:28
Yesterday, we held a welcome party for new laboratory members.

We purchased hors d'oeuvre at a Chinese restaurant, and alcohol at a bottle shop.

Then, we brought them in our laboratory and started the party.

Since I had to drive, I couldn't drink, but I made a hearty meal.

Also, the party was fun.

Now, I feel something lying on my stomach.
No. 1　82ak3t's correction
  • Welcome Party
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Yesterday, we held a welcome party for new laboratory members.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • We purchased hors d'oeuvre at a Chinese restaurant, and alcohol at a bottle shop.
  • We purchased hors d'oeuvre at a Chinese restaurant, and alcohol at a party store.
    　"Party store", I think, is more common (at least where I live in America).
  • Then, we brought them in our laboratory and started the party.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Since I had to drive, I couldn't drink, but I made a hearty meal.
  • Since I had to drive, I couldn't drink, but I enjoyed a hearty meal.
    　What you wrote is perfect on its own, but I wasn't sure if you meant that you made dinner or that you had a lot to eat (instead of drinking alcohol).
  • Also, the party was fun.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Now, I feel something lying on my stomach.
  • Now, I feel something strange in my stomach.
    　What you wrote is grammatically fine, but it means that something is directly on top of your stomach (like a sleeping dog or a blanket or something). Saying that you feel something in your stomach implies an internally felt sensation instead of an externally felt one. Again, I'm not sure if this is what you want to say, but here it is anyway.
kanotown
Thank you so much for correcting my post!
Your comments are very informative. :D
82ak3t
No problem!
No. 2　thethinker83's correction
  • Yesterday, we held a welcome party for new laboratory members.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • We purchased hors d'oeuvre at a Chinese restaurant, and alcohol at a bottle shop.
  • We purchased hors d'oeuvres at a Chinese restaurant, and alcohol at a bottle shop liquor store.
    　"Bottle shop" is actually correct (I had to look it up). "Liquor store" is a more common term.
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :)
I learned something new.
No. 3　ラッテ・エクレア's correction
  • Welcome Party
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Yesterday, we held a welcome party for new laboratory members.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • We purchased hors d'oeuvre at a Chinese restaurant, and alcohol at a bottle shop.
  • We purchased hors d'oeuvre at a Chinese restaurant, and alcohol at a liquor shop.
  • Then, we brought them in our laboratory and started the party.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Since I had to drive, I couldn't drink, but I made a hearty meal.
  • Since I had to drive, I couldn't drink, but I made a hearty meal.
    　You could say you ate one to make the sentence valid. Saying you made it is a bit off topic for the sentence. If you really made one, you could say this:

    I made/prepared a hearty meal for the party. Since I had to drive, I couldn't drink.
  • Also, the party was fun.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Now, I feel something lying on my stomach.
  • Now, I feel something weird on my stomach.
    　You could also say, "I feel sick."
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post!
It's helpful for me! :D
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